thanks! i actually recorded an audio version of this yesterday (if you’re interested): https://funkwhale.it/library/tracks/17487

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i have changed some bits of both chapters already, actually. but it was merely grammatical stuff. i do very extensive editing before i post a chapter, which is part of the reason it takes me so long to release new chapters. i do have a slight fear of “getting stuck” because i committed to a certain plot point or character quirk in an earlier chapter (and i don’t plan to make changes of this nature retroactively), so, in this way, i’m sorta bound by what i have already released, which is an interesting limitation to say the least.

*and i appreciate your interest!

anything goes

for you, none; why would you sign up for more than one to begin with? this is for anyone who hasn’t signed up for multiple yet-another-indie-writing platforms and is looking for a federated write freely instance to join (considering write.as is closed for registration).

i am imagining, if you will. fascinating and creative. nice work. there is so much going on around us, we care about so little in the grand scheme of things.

they’re aimed at teens/young-adults but it’s fun spotting the direct inspirations and differences. also, several Studio Ghibli films are based on books: Howl’s Moving Castle, Tales from Earthsea, The Secret World Of Arietty (kind of), and maybe a few others.

weird mix, but Kiki’s Delivery Service during the day and Infinite Jest before bed.

I appreciate you taking the time to read the peice and your sincere feedback! I won’t make any changes to the piece now, as I consider it finished (even if flawed), although I will incorporate your feedback into my future writing; especially the bit around tenses and perspectives, something I need to work on across all my writing.

I can see how the references to Arcadia may be perceived as pretentious, was a risk. The original reference comes from the title of the painting “Et in Arcadia ego,” which is the first chapter’s title. Specifically, the second popular interpretation regarding nostalgia.

“…this second version shifted the focus from a warning about the inevitability of death to a contemplation of the past and a sense of nostalgia.”

Plus, yes, it sounds like Arcade (lol) and it’s used in a similar fashion in a manga/anime I enjoy titled “Space Captain Harlock: Arcadia of my Youth.” In the essay’s sense, we view our youth as Arcadia – the golden age of splendor when everything was grand and intoxicating; a place in our mind we try to get back to.

The second chapter is a reference to ‘unaware’ (or maybe ‘ignorant’), and refers specifically to Jake living in my (or maybe his own) Arcadia but being unaware of it (considering his condition), the third chapter title simply continues the Latin naming convention with “My Golden Years.” So, yes, maybe a bit pretentious.

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this is just a smidgen of the first-world’s self-inflicted punishment. very excited to see what happens next.

o_o

ah, that must be why i made a thread admitting to playing a hentai game https://lemmy.world/post/6575601

that’s a big no-no

that dungeon he scouted turned out to be your home

i bought a P-Watch due to the circular aesthetic, have been wearing mine since release. it’s “OK” but last week i fell on my bicycle and scratched up the watch face pretty badly, so QUITE annoying that there is no repair program.

doesn’t matter though, switching to a classic Cassio watch soon anyways. “Smart Watches” aren’t that helpful for me, ultimately i don’t understand the appeal. it’s just PHONE ON WRIST, seems like another way to “PLUG INTO THE MATRIX”